I have to write a descriptive piece about an old woman standing on the edge of a cliff looking at the ocean. (its about a story. the woman is very old and wrinkled) So far I have...
Her loose cotton skirt twined around her refined ankles, grasping and pulling with the current of the whispering breeze. Her once auburn hair blown over her shoulders, streaked with woven strands of silver. The ocean閳ユ獨 soft waves soothingly clapping across the rocky shore lulled her into serenity with its methodical, mesmerizing rhythm.
Senescence had taken the youth from her soft, supple face, leaving her complexion a road map of wisdom, folded with faded memories and scathed with regret.
Can I improve on anything? Are there any great similes/metaphors/figures of speech I could use or any great vocab words to add?
Any feedback would be appreciated!!!! thanks!
Help with descriptive writing homework?
Sounds great.
Mustn't 'blown' be 'blows'? Or 'is blown'?
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